{"id":9575,"date":"2015-06-19T15:00:39","date_gmt":"2015-06-19T19:00:39","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/www.bu.edu\/writingprogram\/?page_id=9575"},"modified":"2015-08-17T15:30:11","modified_gmt":"2015-08-17T19:30:11","slug":"espinosa","status":"publish","type":"page","link":"https:\/\/www.bu.edu\/writingprogram\/journal\/past-issues\/issue-7\/espinosa\/","title":{"rendered":"Translating Troubles: Alliterative Verse in Sir Gawain and the Green Knight<\/em>"},"content":{"rendered":"

Alicia Espinosa<\/h2>\n

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Untitled and virtually unknown until the nineteenth century, the small manuscript containing the poem that would later become known as Sir Gawain and the Green Knight<\/em> languished in obscurity. The identity of the author who wrote Sir Gawain<\/em> remains a mystery and the author\u2019s biography conjecture. One thing, however, is certain about the Gawain-poet: he was a master of alliterative verse. The Gawain-poet\u2019s use of alliterative verse was rare in the fourteenth century. Alliterative verse seemed rustic to southern England (Tolkien 14); it only remained prevalent in midland and northern regions in this century, before it disappeared in the fifteenth century (Borroff XV). The Gawain-poet uses alliteration to his advantage, forming memorable, powerful lines using the stressed syllables and rhythm of alliterative verse in Sir Gawain<\/em>, such as:<\/p>\n

\u201c \u00dee tulk \u00feat \u00fee trammes of tresoun \u00feer wro\u021dt\u201d (Line 3)[1]<\/sup><\/p>\n

and<\/p>\n

\u201cOn mony bonkkes ful brode Bretayn he settez wyth wynne\u201d (Line 15)[2]<\/sup><\/sup><\/p>\n

Using the parameters of alliterative verse, the Gawain-poet conjures revulsion toward betrayers and traitors and anticipation for the coming story. Some translators of the Gawain-poet\u2019s Middle English, however, do not emphasize the preservation of the poet\u2019s alliterative verse. These translators instead focus on making the Middle English comprehensible to modern audiences, allowing the alliterative verse to again fall into obscurity. However, while translating for meaning is important, the most authentic translation of Sir Gawain and the Green Knight<\/em> is one that primarily focuses on preserving the alliterative verse of the Gawain-poet. Forgoing the alliterative verse alters those characteristics that define the untranslated Sir Gawain<\/em>: the original tone and mood, the Gawain-poet\u2019s intent, and its subtle nuances. Simon Armitage, Marie Borroff, and J.R.R. Tolkien, three of the most prominent of Sir Gawain<\/em> translators, each attempt to retain the alliterative verse (with varying degrees of successes) and therefore allow their readers a way to more directly experience the original text.<\/p>\n

Sir Gawain <\/em>follows Gawain\u2019s struggle to fulfill the pact he made with the Green Knight. In this essay, the following lines are taken from stanza 95 in the fourth part of Sir Gawain<\/em>. This stanza details Sir Gawain\u2019s final confrontation with the Green Knight, who references the agreement that he made with Gawain to exchange three days\u2019 worth of prizes to each other. The Knight chastises Gawain for not exchanging the girdle with him, as per their agreement. While the Knight forgives Gawain for breaking their agreement, Gawain expresses his guilt over the matter. A literal translation of this stanza is included in the appendix.<\/p>\n

The alliterative verse the Gawain-poet employs creates a tone and mood that is characteristic to the original text. Through the maintenance of the alliterative verse in a translation, the tone of the Gawain-poet is preserved and brings a translation closer to the original text. Tone and mood change in translations of line 2374 of Sir Gawain.<\/em> The Gawain-poet wrote \u201cCorsed worth cowarddyse and couetyse bo\u00fee.\u201d[3]<\/sup>\u00a0The poet employs a hard c<\/em> alliteration, grabbing the reader\u2019s attention. The combination of grating, hard c<\/em> alliteration and the placement of that alliteration in the line creates a demanding rhythm. Collectively, the alliteration and rhythm creates an anxious, trembling tone in the line. It provokes strong sensations in the reader; one wants to yell out the line. Armitage translates this line as \u201cA curse upon cowardness and covetousness.\u201d While he maintains the hard c<\/em> alliteration, Armitage rearranges the placement of the alliteration and adds a syllable. Armitage\u2019s translation feels uneven; the line sounds incomplete. He de-intensifies the rhythm, and the mood is more passive as a result. The Gawain-poet\u2019s apprehensive tone disappears in exchange for a hesitant tone. Borroff is more successful in preserving the alliterative verse in line 2374. She translates it as \u201cCursed be a cowardly and covetous heart.\u201d Borroff retains the alliterative hard c<\/em> and its grating sound. Her translation places the alliteration in positions similar to those of the original line and possesses the same number of syllables. Thus, Borroff maintains the demanding rhythm of the line and the Gawain-poet\u2019s intense, anxious tone. Line 2374 appears in Tolkien\u2019s translation as \u201cCursed be ye, Coveting, and Cowardice also.\u201d While Tolkien too conserves the hard c <\/em>alliteration, he changes the syllabic length of the line and slows the rhythm. The translated line reads as more refined than intense and more angry than nervous.<\/p>\n

Omitting the alliterative verse when translating Sir Gawain<\/em> changes the intent of the Gawain-poet and distances the translation from the original text. Line 2371 in Sir Gawain<\/em> displays how the Gawain-poet\u2019s intent becomes modified through translation. The line describes Gawain during his second confrontation with the Green Knight and originally reads, \u201cAlle \u00fee blode of his breast blende in his face.\u201d[4]<\/sup>\u00a0The stressed b<\/em> syllables create an unforgiving sound, and generates a rhythm that tempts the reader to rush through the line, to say it quickly. The rhythm mirrors blood rushing toward Gawain\u2019s face. Altogether, the alliterative verse in line 2371 produces an intense atmosphere and implies the Gawain-poet\u2019s intent to foreshadow Gawain\u2019s anxiety later in the stanza. Armitage translates line 2371 as \u201cand the fire of his blood brought flames to his face.\u201d Armitage replaces the b<\/em> alliteration in favor of f<\/em>, generating a slithery, whispery sound not present in the original line, but which steadies the rhythm. His removal of the b <\/em>alliteration changes the original intense atmosphere, since he does not mirror Gawain\u2019s blushing. Hence, Armitage\u2019s translation removes the Gawain-poet\u2019s intent to foreshadow Gawain\u2019s later anxiety. Borroff, in contrast, translates line 2371 as \u201cAll the blood of his body burned in his face.\u201d She retains the poet\u2019s b<\/em> alliteration and places the alliteration in similar positions to the original line, allowing Borroff to preserve the hasty rhythm. Borroff\u2019s maintenance of the Gawain-poet\u2019s original alliterative verse enables the presence of a similar intense atmosphere and foreshadowing of Gawain\u2019s anxiety. Tolkien translates this line as \u201cAll the blood from his breast in his blush mingled.\u201d Like Borroff, Tolkien retains the b<\/em> alliteration and the unforgiving sound it creates. Tolkien, however, translates \u201cblende\u201d as \u201cmingled\u201d and places \u201cmingled\u201d at the end of his translated line, unlike the Gawain-poet. \u201cMingled\u201d adds extra syllables and alters the original rhythm. Instead of wishing to rush through the line, one now wants to drag out the line. By altering the rhythm, Tolkien reduces the intense atmosphere. The insertion of a more passive atmosphere removes the Gawain-poet\u2019s intent to foreshadow.<\/p>\n

The essence of Sir Gawain <\/em>lies in the poem\u2019s alliterative verse. Without its distinctive form, the poem loses that which characterizes it and separates the poem from other fourteenth century works. Without the alliterative verse, the work becomes prose, not poetry. Thus, a translator whose primary focus is to make a work easier to understand and ignores the alliterative verse will change the essence of Sir Gawain<\/em>. The meaning of the original poem is present in the translation, but the poem loses its particular flavor and subtle nuances. Translations of the line \u201cFor hit is my wede \u00feat \u00feou werez, \u00feat ilke wouen girdel\u201d (2358) clearly shows how the essence of the line changes when the translator favors meaning over alliterative verse. The Gawain-poet, in this line, employs an alliterative w<\/em> consonant which creates a smooth, gliding sound. This line also possesses a steady, even rhythm. The combination of the smooth sound and steady rhythm reminds one of a loom, on which the girdle would have been woven.<\/p>\n

Armitage translates line 2358 as \u201cBecause the belt you are bound with belongs to me.\u201d He chooses to make this line easier to understand by replacing wede <\/em>(weeds<\/em>, as in widow\u2019s weeds<\/em>) with the more commonly used belt<\/em> and omitting girdel<\/em>. The replacement of wede<\/em> and omitting of girdel<\/em> changes the essence of the line. Wede <\/em>starts the w<\/em> alliteration in the original line; however, it is now belt<\/em> that the alliteration centers on in Armitage\u2019s translation. The b<\/em> alliteration does not create the Gawain-poet\u2019s original gliding sound, but rather gives the line a more percussive sound. The percussive sound also lends an anticipatory atmosphere that is not present in the original line 2358. Armitage\u2019s omitting of girdel<\/em> upsets the steady rhythm of the line by removing two of the line\u2019s original nineteen syllables. In tandem, the percussive sound and different rhythm are not reminiscent of a working loom. Indeed, Armitage\u2019s rhythm causes line 2358 to read more like a sentence rather than a line in a stanza.<\/p>\n

Borroff, however, translates this line as \u201cFor that is my belt about you, that same braided girdle.\u201d Borroff, like Armitage, translates wede<\/em> as belt<\/em> and subsequently alters the original w<\/em> alliteration to b<\/em> alliteration. Borroff\u2019s translated line consequentially possesses the percussive sound of b<\/em>, not the gliding w<\/em>. Unlike Armitage, Borroff places the alliteration in similar positions to that of the Gawain-poet\u2019s. Borroff, though, does not omit girdel<\/em> from her translation and thus retains the original nineteen syllables. The retention of those syllables and position of the alliteration allows Borroff to form an even rhythm that is comparable to the steady rhythm of the original line 2358. While Borroff successfully maintains the Gawain-poet\u2019s rhythm, she sacrifices the effect of the alliteration by translating wede<\/em> as belt<\/em> (not weed<\/em>). Her translation loses the smooth w <\/em>sound, that would have, in combination with the steady rhythm, remind one of a working loom (as the original line does).<\/p>\n

Finally, Tolkien translates line 2358 as \u201cFor it is my weed that thou wearest, that very woven girdle.\u201d Tolkien\u2019s translation is arguably closest to the original line, since the stylistic elements of his translation are very close to those the Gawain-poet employs. Tolkien, unlike Armitage and Borroff, translates wede<\/em> as weed<\/em> and not belt<\/em>, which allows Tolkien to retain the Gawain-poet\u2019s w <\/em>alliteration and the smooth, gliding sound. Tolkien also matches his placement of the alliteration to the positions in the original line, conserving the original nineteen syllables by not discarding girdel<\/em>, and preserves the even, steady rhythm of the Gawain-poet. By preserving the original sound and rhythm, Tolkien does not lose the evocation of a working loom. Tolkien\u2019s success in maintaining the style and essence of the Gawain-poet centers around Tolkien\u2019s choice to translate wede <\/em>as weed<\/em> and not belt<\/em>. Weed<\/em>, like wede<\/em>, refers to a garment, but weed<\/em> in this sense is archaic and not commonly known. By translating wede<\/em> as weed<\/em>, Tolkien prioritizes the effect of the w<\/em> alliteration over using a more commonly known word like belt<\/em> in place of wede<\/em>. Tolkien\u2019s choice of alliterative verse over easy understanding allows him to retain the flavor and nuances of line 2358.<\/p>\n

In conclusion, alliterative verse forms the core of Sir Gawain and the Green Knight<\/em>. Translators who only translate for meaning and forgo the re-creation of the Gawain-poet\u2019s alliterative verse cause their translations to lose or change those aspects which make Sir Gawain so distinctive, such as the reading experience, the Gawain-poet\u2019s original intent, and the essence of the poem itself. Without alliterative verse, a translation may convey the meaning of the original poem, but the translation loses its poetic appeal. A translation of Sir Gawain<\/em> reads similarly to prose without alliterative verse, not poetry. Thus, the most successful and authentic translations of Sir Gawain and the Green Knight<\/em> are those which preserve the alliterative verse of the Gawain-poet. Accounting for alliterative verse when translating may make the translation harder to understand, but maintaining the alliterative verse allows readers a way to more directly experience the original text.<\/p>\n

Notes<\/h2>\n

1.\u00a0\u201cThe man that the stratagem of treason there wrought.\u201d All translations not attributed Armitage, Borroff, or Tokein are my by myself and Dr. Sarah Campbell.<\/span>
\n2.\u00a0\u201cOn many banks Britain full broad he rules \/ with joy.\u201d<\/span>
\n3.\u00a0See appendix for literal translation.<\/span>
\n4.\u00a0See appendix for translation.<\/span><\/p>\n

Works Cited<\/h2>\n

The Pearl Poet. Sir Gawain and the Green Knight: A New Verse Translation<\/em>. Trans. Simon Armitage. New York: W. W. Norton, 2007. Print.<\/p>\n

—. Sir Gawain and the Green Knight<\/em>. Trans. Marie Borroff. Ed. Marie Boroff and Laura Howes. New York and London: W. W. Norton, 2010. Print.<\/p>\n

Sir Gawain and the Green Knight, Pearl, Sir Orfeo: Three Tales from the Middle Ages<\/em>. Trans. J.R.R. Tolkien. Boston: Houghton Mifflin, 1978. Print.<\/p>\n

Appendix<\/h2>\n

Literal translation of Stanza 95, lines 2358\u20132388:<\/p>\n

For it is my clothes that you wear, that is same woven girdle,
\nMy own wife wove it; I know it well for truth.
\nNow I know well your kisses, and your behavior as well,\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a02360
\nAnd the wooing of my wife, I planned it myself.
\nI sent her to test you, and truly I think,
\nYou, one of the most perfect knights who ever set foot on earth.
\nAs pearls are to white peas, you are more precious,
\nIn this way, Gawain, in good faith, than other fine knights. \u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a02365
\nBut here you lacked a little, sir, and loyalty you lacked;
\nBut that was for no wild deed; neither for wooing.
\nBut because you loved your life\u2014the less I blame you.\u2019
\nThat other strong man in study stood a great while,
\nSo overcome with anger, he shuddered within; \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a02370
\nAll the blood in his chest rushed into his face
\nAs he shrank all for shame while the man talked.
\nThe very first words uttered by that knight:
\n\u2018I am cursed by cowardice and avarice both!
\nIn you is villainy and vice that virtue destroys.\u2019\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a02375
\nThen he caught the knot, and wrenched it loose,
\nAnd threw the belt viciously to the man himself:
\n\u2018Lo! There\u2019s the false thing, let it fall!
\nFor fear of your stroke taught me cowardice
\nTo corrupt my courtesy, my worship to forsake,\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0\u00a0 2380
\nThat is largess and loyalty that belongs to knights.
\nNow am I faulty and false, and fears have always been
\nOf treachery and untruth–both betide sorrow
\nAnd care!
\nI confess to you, knight, here,
\nAll fault is my own;
\nLet me regain your good will
\nAnd ever after, I shall beware.\u2019<\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"

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